请高人帮我检查下语法问题My hometown is famous for two world heritage,one is Dujiangyan irrigation system which is unique and a scientific marvel in water work construction of ancient China,Built over 2300 years ago by a local official at

请高人帮我检查下语法问题My hometown is famous for two world heritage,one is Dujiangyan irrigation system which is unique and a scientific marvel in water work construction of ancient China,Built over 2300 years ago by a local official at
请高人帮我检查下语法问题
My hometown is famous for two world heritage,one is Dujiangyan irrigation system which is unique and a scientific marvel in water work construction of ancient China,Built over 2300 years ago by a local official at that time named Li Bing,the system still controls the waters of the Minjiang River and distributes it to the fertile farmland of the Chengdu plains.As a result the Chengdu Plain has been free of flooding and the people have been living peacefully and affluently,now the project is honored as the “treasure of Sichuan”
The other one is the Mt.Qingcheng,known as the fifth among the most famous Taoism Mountains in China,is the place where the Taoism came into being,The temples of Mount Qingcheng are closely associated with the foundation of Taoism,one of the most influential religions of East Asia over a long period of history.

请高人帮我检查下语法问题My hometown is famous for two world heritage,one is Dujiangyan irrigation system which is unique and a scientific marvel in water work construction of ancient China,Built over 2300 years ago by a local official at
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"The other one is the Mt.Qingcheng,known as the fifth among the most famous Taoism Mountains in China,is the place where the Taoism came into being."我觉得应该为：
“The other one is Mt.Qingcheng,known as the fifth of the rank of the most famous Taoism Mountains in Chian,which is the place the Taoism came into being.”
"one of the most influential religions of East Asia over a long period of history"前应加“which is”不然指代不清
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