有木有还醒着的英语高手!求批改作文啦.十分感谢!I am now reading a book named , written by Sheryl Sandberg. Sandberg is one of the primary organizers of Facebook and gets quitehighly achievement in financial management. Besides the

有木有还醒着的英语高手!求批改作文啦.十分感谢!I am now reading a book named , written by Sheryl Sandberg. Sandberg is one of the primary organizers of Facebook and gets quitehighly achievement in financial management. Besides the
有木有还醒着的英语高手!求批改作文啦.十分感谢!
I am now reading a book named , written by Sheryl Sandberg. Sandberg is one of the primary organizers of Facebook and gets quitehighly achievement in financial management. Besides the accomplishment on her career, she also succeeds to keep a balance between work and family. Her storyis encourages a lot people, especially office ladies. The points she sharingwith us is that the most important things you should do is know yourself,position yourself, and then, following your heart finding out what you reallywant to do. After that, just set out, don’t worry about. Furthermore, sheprovides us some recommendations about life. For example, I do impressing aboutone sentence “The way to success is not rely on passion, but depend onrationality and persistence”.

有木有还醒着的英语高手!求批改作文啦.十分感谢!I am now reading a book named , written by Sheryl Sandberg. Sandberg is one of the primary organizers of Facebook and gets quitehighly achievement in financial management. Besides the
1、she also 【succeeds in keeping】 a balance
2、The points she 【shares】with us
3、you should do is 【to】know yourself ,【give yourself a accurate evaluation】,and then 【follow】your heart to 【find】out what you really want to do.【Thus】,just set out with no worry.
4、she provides us 【with】some rec..
5、I 【am impressed by】the sentence...
语法还不够啊,另外行文还缺乏逻辑.加油!

I “am currently” reading a book named , written by Sheryl Sandberg. “Sandburg” is one of the primary organizers of Facebook and gets“ quite highly” achievement in financial management. Beside...

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I “am currently” reading a book named , written by Sheryl Sandberg. “Sandburg” is one of the primary organizers of Facebook and gets“ quite highly” achievement in financial management. Besides the accomplishment on her career, she also succeeds “to maintain” a balance between work and family. Her “stories encourage” a lot people, especially office ladies. The points she “sharing with” us “are” that the most important things you should do “be known” yourself,position yourself, and then, following your heart finding out what you really want to do. After that, just set out, don’t worry about. Furthermore, she provides us some recommendations about life. For example, I do impress about one sentence “The way to success is not rely on passion, but depend on rationality and persistence”.
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1., 去括号，改Lean In
2.gets quitehighly achievement 改为has got...
3 on her career改为in her career
4. succeeds to keep a balance between work and family改为succeeds in keeping a balance be...

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1., 去括号，改Lean In
2.gets quitehighly achievement 改为has got...
3 on her career改为in her career
4. succeeds to keep a balance between work and family改为succeeds in keeping a balance between the demands of her family and her work
5.Her storyis encourages a lot people改 Her story encourages a lot of people
6.following your heart finding out what you reallywant to do. 改follow your heart and find out what....
7 After that, just set out, don’t worry about.亲，这句改改啊。
8 sheprovides us 改she provides us with..
9 I do impressing aboutone sentence 要不改成 I do appreciate this sentence...
很困，努力加油。。。。

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I am now reanding a book named Lean In, written by sheryl Sandberg. Sandberg is one of the primary organizers of Facebook and gets quite highly achievements in financial management. Besides the accomp...

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I am now reanding a book named Lean In, written by sheryl Sandberg. Sandberg is one of the primary organizers of Facebook and gets quite highly achievements in financial management. Besides the accomplishment on her career, she also succeed in keeping a balance between work and family. Her stories encourage a lot of pepole, especially office ladies. The point she share with us is that the most important thing you should do is to know yourself, position yourself, and then, following your heart to find out what you really want to do. After that, just set out and don't worry anything. Futhermore, she provided us some recommendations about life. For example, I do impresed about one sentence" The way to success is not rely on passion, but depend on nationality and persistence.

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